The cave was dark and smelled like rotting flesh. What Brinvok found astounding is that despite the ungodly smell in the cave, it was spotless, there was not even cobwebs on the corners of the tunnel. The Baolab seemed transfixed by an unknown force deep within the volcano. The smell began to grow stronger and stronger as they ventured farther into the lair.
Brinvok looked forward down the passage and flickering in the distance was a purple flame that while faint seemed like a beacon in the darkness of the cave. He then looked up into the eyes of the Baolab and saw that its eyes were radiating the same purple as the light. As the beast marched onward the flame grew in size and intensity until it appeared to be the size of the tunnel.
Is this some weird suicide pact? Or perhaps I will just be thrown into the fire as some sort of sacrifice. Brinvok thought these questions and many more as all of a sudden they were answered. I was not that the fire was as big as the tunnel, the fire was bigger than the tunnel and was at the end of the tunnel in a big central chamber. There was thick purple lava at the bottom of the chamber that erupted purple plumes of purple fire up into the air and back down again.
“It is as if the volcano wants to erupt again” Brinvok said aloud.
“More like, we want it to erupt again, and we are doing everything we can to get the volcano to erupt again” the Baolab said to Brinvok in such a way that sounded like he had just snapped out of his trance.
‘How many of you are there…?” Brinvok began asking but trailed off as he saw hundreds of other Guardians lining the walls of the chamber throwing things into the fire. At first Brinvok could not make out what they were throwing in, but as he strained to see he saw that they were throwing rocks mostly into the lava, as if they thought that they were raising the level of the lava which could be true, Brinvok pondered. He also saw them throwing animals, livestock mostly into the lava.
Suddenly, Brinvok’s concentration broke as he heard the scream of a young maiden. He looked into the direction of the scream and saw that a Guardian, a Swamp Monger had a woman by her leg and was about to plop her into the lava when suddenly a deep booming voice that seemed to resonate within the volcano saying.
“Well well well, we have a lively one don’t we”
An engaging progression to the story so far. As for one thing I have noticed grammatically, there are a lot of sentences that include both a setting points and an action description, which gets a bit confusing in regards to associating story details. Also there seems to be a lot of purple. “There was think purple lava at the bottom of the chamber that erupted purple plumes of purple fire up into the air and back down again.” As for Brinvok, it is interesting to hear his confusion in his thoughts, but perhaps some quotation marks are needed to separate it from the rest of the story. Keep it up! It’s going great.
ReplyDelete